Poison in a Jar

VisDareThank you to Angela Goff for creating the ‘VisDare’ image prompts each Wednesday for us to write a 150 word Flash-Fiction piece.

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Poison in a Jar


“You know she’s poison, right? You let her out and we may as well all be dead”

“But, she looks so sad, so timid”

“That’s what she wants you to think, she’s getting in your head Tony”

Tony could do little but marvel at the figure, sealed in glass for who knows how long. But she must have been put there for a reason, the reason that the poison she carries needs containing. Yet, he couldn’t just leave her.

“Phil, you and the guys go ahead and I’ll catch you up; I want to take some more photo’s of her”.


Tony got to work on the jar. And with one mighty crack, the glass shattered.

She untwined herself. And stood for a moment, simply regarding him.

Tony was mesmerised.

“May I thank you?” The creature asked, as she came closer to him.

He could feel her breath entwine with his.

Then he simply just crumbled to the ground and died.

She then began her search – for the rest of them.

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VisDare 63: Poison Photo source here



6 thoughts on “Poison in a Jar

  1. Argh! Curiosity killed the cat – or more likely the guy that thought he knew better… But sometimes, we make changes for the better if we follow our instincts. Oh the confusion… I really enjoyed this cautionary tale 🙂


    1. Hi Freya, he sure was a sucker for the doe-eyed girl and had the life literally sucked out of him as a result. It’s the age-old ‘can leopards change their spots’ type of scenario which now seems I was totally biased towards. I might have a mental re-write and see how it could have gone the other way. But, I am glad you liked it 🙂


    1. Hi Angela! So sorry for the late reply, life got in the way big time; I didn’t even have the time to read everyone else’s story’s. For mine though, I really enjoyed writing it, it’s quite a spooky and supernatural take on the picture. As it’s 2am (having had a not very good sleep) I’m concentrating on catching up with the comments; I hope to read the others plus to try and see why mine too you so by surprise – let me know if you get the chance. But very happy that you liked it. Thank you 🙂


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