School for Vampires

Friday Fictioneers – 100 word Flash Fiction piece from an image prompt. Courtesy of Rochelle Wisoff-Fields

Friday Fictioneers | Miriam-Reuben
Friday Fictioneers | Miriam-Reuben Wisoff

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School for Vampires

 

PHOTO PROMPT Copyright -Jennifer Pendergast

 

Jason and a frightened Holly, hand in hand, stared at what was their way out to freedom.

“It’s okay Hol, the others said it’s safe – it’s our way out of here, what we’ve been searching for, for so long. It’s okay, I promise”

How reassured Holly was feeling was not close to how certain Jason felt.

“What if it’s a lie, a myth? A fantasy that we could ever break free of this place. I’m scared Jay”

“Keep hold of my hand Hol, and on 3 we run and leap”

They did. And were never seen again.

Nor their bodies found.

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Friday Fictioneers May 30th Photo source here

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15 thoughts on “School for Vampires

  1. Dear Victoria,

    I like to think this is a positive outcome. The portal led to a brighter place with no vampires. 😉 Nice that you left us pondering a mystery. Well imagined.

    Lovely photo of my paternal grandmother, isn’t it? Miriam Reubin Wisoff. She was a poet.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. So that lady is your Grandma, I think that’s lovely you use her photo on your site and yes, it is a very beautiful photo! I was looking for the FF badge to put at the start of the story and figured this is the pic you are now using – which I don’t think is a bad idea at all to represent FF… maybe something to think about?

      Re: This weeks story; as soon as I saw the pic I had the story straight away – which we have spoke many times now about inspiration coming or not. I need to quickly fix one word in it, but, yes, these two just wanted to be with each other away from the ‘Vampire teachings’ and it is a mystery if they made it as one believed and the other didn’t, but I think hope may have prevailed this time. Thanks for visiting 🙂

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    1. Hi, my thought was if Vampires, who can allegedly ‘fly’, it could be an either/or ending. Then again, they turn to ash or something if they die, so could they be gone or literally gone? (sorry, I’ve got my own brain thinking now reading the comments 😉 ! I hope you liked it nonetheless 🙂

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    1. Hi, hi! Re:Crit Feedback… I used a wrong tense and it was pointed out and it took a few re-reads of ‘why’ and I am happy to say, I got it! 😉 My partner went to Uni and he’s helped a lot with my English – I was basically rubbish in English at school so it takes me a bit longer to figure it all out – but it is much easier when someone points the mistakes out, and in my case, I eventually see what they mean!
      Anyway, after my digression, I’m glad you liked my creepy tale! 🙂

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  2. i hope the leap took them to the freedom they were seeking for. i love the details you added with the one brave character looking out for the other more timid one – they both seem to be either very close friends or siblings. every enjoyable story. 🙂

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    1. Hi Sun, well, in my mind their leap was for freedom and they did make it. They are teenage boyfriend and girlfriend who wanted to be together, just them, away from the restrictions and impossibility the school would allow. But, the reader can make of it whatever they wish! 🙂 I’m glad you liked it 🙂

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    1. Hi Susan, sorry for responding so late… I’m glad you liked the story and thanks for saying it was written well – feedback helps me a lot. I hope it was a happy ending, well in my mind, they did indeed make it 🙂

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