No Bad Deeds go Unpunished

Genre: Horror-esque

Thomas Baker was indeed one of the world’s pessimists. A gaunt fellow in need of some food, clean clothes and a mighty good shave. And a dose of luck. Through a series of misfortunes, Tom Baker had lost everything: his wife, house, job, car and children. Who could blame him for his lack of optimism. I don’t. But the day was coming when his run of bad luck would all change.

In the busy shopping town of Newquey, Tom found his regular spot between a supermarket and a department store. Making himself comfortable – as comfortable as one can be sitting on a concrete floor – he began his desperate mantra to the shoppers: “Please spare me some change, please?”.

A few hours later, with little more than Β£1.50, Tom was despondent, depressed and dejected. Just as he was about to get up with his measly pennies a voice brought him out of his stupor. He looked up to find an elderly, kind face looking down at him. The man was dressed almost like a Priest, Tom thought. The man had Tom’s attention. And began to share a Secret with him.

Tom wanted proof. Proof that what the man had told him was true. That he could get back everything he had lost, and more. All he had to do was go to some Church situated behind some bend on some avenue somewhere up the road and pray at its altar. Tom thought he knew this town: he’d never seen this Church nor got the scoop from anyone else that it existed. But, Tom had nothing to lose and so began to follow the priests directions on the scrap of paper in his hand.Β 

Reaching the location, there was indeed a Church and Tom wondered how he’d never seen it before. Okay it’s obscured and a little small, but surely he would have heard of it. Shrugging, he pushes the door open and enters.

Now, The kind Priest is in fact a collector. He takes souls from those who have done wrong in their life. And Tom had done plenty wrong.

He cheated on his Wife, continually. Set fire to his house for an insurance payout, incinerating the dogs in the process. Assaulted his boss causing internal bleeding, a head trauma and broken ribs (and, naturally, was sacked). Crashed his car deliberately for insurance money and severely injured an elderly couple . And he ignored his children their whole young lives. The circumstances he is now in was all of his own doing. And deserves no pity.

He was approaching the altar and getting ready to pray, when the priest stepped out from, to Tom, what seemed like nowhere. “I need you to sign this before you pray”, the Priest told him. Tom signed, not even reading it. He just wanted to get on with getting his life back regardless of the detriment it would cause his family especially. He simply didn’t care.

Folding the papers into his pocket, the Priest mumbled a few words then clapped his hands once.

Tom immediately found himself in his bed, in his home, laying next to his wife. It worked, he thought excitedly, it bloody worked! Hang on, this feels real, he said to himself now thinking it was a bad dream he just had.

But the house? Why is it still standing? Why are the dogs alive and growling at me? Why is my boss also in the bed cuddling my wife? Why are the children just standing there wielding knives? He didn’t understand.

Then his wife stirred. “Hello Dear. Guess what? This is where your real nightmare begins. Welcome to your very own personal Hell and kissed his cheek. Then she and the others turned into The Black Demons – from Hell.


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Hello! πŸ™‚ I am soooo glad to have got this story written. I nearly quit when the brain-fog began to enter. It was great to finally finish it.

The Prompt is from a newly found Weekly Writing Challenge I discovered over at Jennifer Kiley’s ‘Secret Keeper’ blog. Click here to check it out. 5 words are given each Monday to weave any type of Poem or Flash piece. The 5 words for this week (#56) are -Proof-Share-Secret-Bend-Scoop. And here is the posts direct link.

And, as always, Thank you very much for reading and come back again soon! πŸ™‚


7 thoughts on “No Bad Deeds go Unpunished

  1. I was intrigued by the comment you left on the secret keeper. It compelled me to take a read. Love the cunning way you told your tale. The story held up its end with a divinely rich conclusion. Not so much for the main character, but it was just waiting for him to arrive. Loved it. – j.kiley

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    1. Hello! Firstly, thank you very much for taking the time to read my story, and second – I am so glad you liked it!! πŸ˜€ Hopefully today’s won’t take as long to write as this one took πŸ™‚ Your positive comment has really made my day! πŸ™‚

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      1. I look forward when I am able, to read what is created from the words I post. Energy wise, I don’t often leave comments, but I felt your story was so compelling, I needed to express my enjoyment & hoped it would be an encouragement to continue being challenged. I am so pleased my comment had such a good effect.πŸ˜‡πŸ˜ŽπŸŽ‡

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        1. Hi! It was a welcome comment indeed 😊 I’m v glad you messaged because as I write this I’m in a hospital bed! I was in emergency Monday night and getting surgery tonight. I don’t think I’ll be participating on this week’s words. But next week I defo will be. So please don’t worry. Another reason I’m so glad is because you took the time to read it. Compared to the 150 word flash pieces I normally do maybe readers got put off. Either way I’m glad you liked it and I’ll be ‘in’ next week! πŸ™‚πŸ™‚πŸ™‚

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          1. Good Luck. Too familiar with Hospitals but usually everyone works in harmony. I have found nothing but support so I wish you the same. Let me know how you are doing when able to. πŸ™‚πŸŒΊπŸŒΌπŸ€πŸ ps. Look forward to reading more of your flash pieces.


          2. Hello Jennifer, how are you? Hospital stay was short thankfully and even better was the antibiotics they pumped me with did its job and I avoided surgery. But, I have to see my nurse several times a week for at least 4 weeks. I’ll be glad when it’s over. Okay, I shall be back participating as soon as I can, hopefully next week now, and I just wanted to drop you a msg let you know how things are going πŸ˜€πŸ˜ŠπŸ™‚

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          3. It sounds like you are on the mend. Avoiding the knife at all costs. I managed to do that this week. Still I have this unusual health issue which my neurologist is trying to work out. It’s a nasty problem. I don’t like the word illness. It’s more a struggle to get stronger & hopefully find some form of recovery. Here’s hoping we both do well. πŸ€πŸ˜ŽπŸŽˆ


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